Drabble: For Lisa
Sep. 29th, 2012 01:32 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
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Title: For Lisa
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Characters: Ianto, Lisa
Rating: G
Written For: Challenge 253 – Moving Mountains at ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-community.gif){kind=small}
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Spoilers: Cyberwoman
Summary: Ianto plans ahead.
Disclaimer: I don’t own Torchwood, or the characters.
Ianto dragged Lisa from the wreckage of Torchwood One, planning what he needed to do:
Get them both out without being seen. Steal a conversion unit. Rig it to serve as life support. Acquire whatever drugs Lisa needed. Cardiff would be their best chance; he’d need a van to transport everything.
Find somewhere to hole up until he could get a job with Three and smuggle Lisa inside.
He’d have to locate a cybernetics specialist to remove the implants, make Lisa human again.
The list of tasks seemed insurmountable, but it was for Lisa, and for her, he’d move mountains.
The End
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Date: 2012-09-29 12:36 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-09-29 12:42 pm (UTC)Thank you. Yeah, his loyalty is one of the reasons I love Ianto so much. Even faced with seemingly impossible tasks, he'll find a way if it's for someone he loves.
I've had the Lisa idea nagging at me for a couple of days and it's been through several re-writes. I didn't like what I wrote last night, so I scrapped it except for the last line. It's been a busy week, I haven't had time to write anything bigger than a drabble, lol!
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Date: 2012-09-29 02:54 pm (UTC)Poor Ianto. He really would do anything for the one he loves.
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Date: 2012-09-29 03:07 pm (UTC)Yes, he would, but being willing to do anything doesn't necessarily mean it will all work out well. All that planning and effort, and he still lost her. I think fighting to save Lisa was really all that kept Ianto going in the aftermath of Canary Wharf. It gave him a purpose, something to work towards, a reason to keep living, because Lisa was depending on him and he couldn't let her down.
I completely scrapped the first draft this morning, except for the last line which was what I'd started with in the first place. This is much better, though I still like my first drabble for this challenge better.
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Date: 2012-09-29 03:31 pm (UTC)I love Ianto/Lisa fics that show the extent of Ianto's loyalty and the lengths he will go to. He is such a strong character. So young and yet able to achieve almost super-human feats and keep going in the face of such adversity when most people would have crumbled long ago.
And you managed to capture all of that in just 100 words. :-)
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Date: 2012-09-29 03:51 pm (UTC)I think I like the first one better because I had to fight this one so hard and I had to cut 27 words from what I had, which was tough. I feel like it doesn't flow as well as the other one because of that, it's a bit jerky. I love the subject of this one, just not so happy with the way it turned out, I just couldn't refine it any more without losing things.
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Date: 2012-09-29 03:05 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-09-29 03:15 pm (UTC)In Ianto's case, I think he needed the challenge to prevent him having a breakdown. It gave him definite goals to work towards and didn't allow him to think of anything else. Lisa was all that was important to him, so he couldn't let her down, he could have his mental breakdown later, when he had time.
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Date: 2012-09-29 03:44 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-09-29 03:56 pm (UTC)Thank you, this was a tough one to write.
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Date: 2012-09-29 03:47 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-09-29 03:53 pm (UTC)Thank you.
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Date: 2012-09-29 04:01 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-09-29 04:32 pm (UTC)Thank you.
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Date: 2012-09-29 04:19 pm (UTC)Ianto was a list maker and a prioritizer. I agree with you that concentrating on exactly what would be required to save Lisa was what kept him from losing his mind. Every bit of equipment, medication, person to find and contact, every step taken in exactly the correct order necessary to ensure best possible chances for success. Those would be the things he focused on and nothing else would have mattered at that time.
I think it's perfect.
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Date: 2012-09-29 04:36 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-09-29 05:00 pm (UTC)lovely drabble, i like the semi list feel to it
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Date: 2012-09-29 05:44 pm (UTC)My first draft was more of a list than this one, but it felt cold and clinical, too detached. I think there's a bit more emotion in it now, I only kept the last line from the first draft. Even so, it was hard to get it down to 100 words.
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Date: 2012-09-29 07:27 pm (UTC)wonderful!
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Date: 2012-09-29 07:29 pm (UTC)Poor Ianto - he did everything on his list, but it still wasn't enough to save Lisa.
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Date: 2012-10-01 04:38 pm (UTC)K
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Date: 2012-10-01 05:09 pm (UTC)Although it didn't end well, he tried his best!
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Date: 2012-10-02 09:40 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2012-10-02 11:59 am (UTC)Thank you.
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