BtVS Double Drabble: Sweet As Syrup

[bk_forever]

Title: Sweet As Syrup

Fandom: BTVS

Author: badly_knitted

Characters: Drusilla, Angelus

Rating: PG

Spoilers: Nothing in particular

Summary: Drusilla delights in her first taste of blood.

Word Count: 200

Written For: juliet316’s prompt ‘BtVS, Drucilla, blood tastes so sweet, like syrup’ at fic_promptly

Disclaimer: I don’t own BTVS, or the characters. They belong to Joss Whedon.

A/N: I'm not entirely happy with my first foray into BtVS, Drusilla is a hard character to capture and I haven't watched the show in several years. Hopefully I'll do better next time.

Her first taste of blood after she’s turned is a revelation. When she was alive, Drusilla dimly recalls the taste as being metallic, but it’s not. It coats her tongue, hot, heavy and rich, sweet like thick sugar syrup, and she can’t get enough. She drains the man completely while Angelus watches and laughs.

“It’s sweet,” she tells him, delighted. “Sugar cane and honey. I’m the bee and they’re flowers full of nectar, fruit ripe for plucking. I’ll sting them all and drink my fill, drain them dry, empty husks blown away by the wind. Pretty flowers all turned to dust.” Her smile is wicked, sly and full of promise.

They cut a swathe across Europe, bringing terror wherever they go, and it’s perfect; no one can stand in their way. Rumours spread like wildfire and people stay indoors after dark. Dru’s childlike innocence gets her invited to take shelter in house after house. The men say it’s for her protection from the demons that stalk the night, but she sees the lust in their eyes. It soon turns to terror when she shows them her true face, and that’s the best part.

Because fear makes their blood even sweeter.

The End

Comments

[slaymesoftly.livejournal.com]

Well done!

[bk_forever]

Thank you!

I'm still not convinced the dialogue is quite right, but I'm my own worst critic and this is my first attempt at Buffyverse fic, so I can only get better, right?

[kikimay]

Very good fic. I especially like Dru's voice and I like the idea of her using her childlike appareance to collect victims. It seems very fitting.

[red-satin-doll.livejournal.com]

Here from a link on the su_herald - what kikimay said! (And we were just talking on her LJ about the lack of Drusilla-centric fic. More, please.)

If this is your first time at Drusilla dialogue I'm impressed. It is difficult to write "insanity" - by all means keep going.

[bk_forever]

Thank you! I wasn't sure if I'd got Dru's voice quite right, so that's very encouraging.

It felt like something she'd do, the helpless act to get herself invited inside where she could feed, maybe on a whole family; it would delight her, making pretty patterns with their blood.

[bk_forever]

I'll have to try again when i find another suitable prompt, ideas can be hard to come by when you're juggling several fandoms and the only reason this got written at all was because I had to find prompts with female characters for one day of a a writing contest and it turned out I was familiar with pitifully few of the fandoms on offer. The other BtVS ficlets I wrote were Buffy, Joyce and a short Willow/Tara piece. Haven't posted those yet, but I'll get there eventually.

Prompts are welcome; I'm going to try to fit in rewatching BtVs (along with everything else I'm trying to squeeze in to what free time I have). I'd like to write more in the fandom and Dru is one of my favourite characters. If I get prompts from other people, I can post them on the prompt community I belong to and write them myself during the next challenge!

Glad you liked this one, and thanks for commenting!

[xspike4evax.livejournal.com]

I think you did a great job with Dru. She is indeed a very difficult character to get right but you did it. You should be proud!

[bk_forever]

Thank you, it means a lot that you think so. I haven't watched BtVS for several years and this is my first attempt at writing the character. My memory must be better than I thought!

[killing-kurare.livejournal.com]

I loved that :) It really captures Dru's personality in my opinion.
"Pretty flowers all turned to dust." So IC.
"The men say it’s for her protection from the demons that stalk the night, but she sees the lust in their eyes." Love that detail.
"Because fear makes their blood even sweeter." Perfect ending :D

Totally enjoyed reading <3

[bk_forever]

*grins* Thank you so much! I had a tough time writing this one so I'm really pleased people are liking it =)

Thanks for your lovely comments!

[red-satin-doll.livejournal.com]

I just read your Willow/Tara ficlet - I would love to read your Joyce & Buffy one when you're ready to show it off because Joyce and Buffy fic is like crack cocaine to me but there is so little of it out there!

I watched the show two years ago and it amazes me how, for a show with a female protagonist and several important female characters in her life, how little interest there is in exploring those relationships; in proportion to the amount of "shippy" fic.

Or I guess it shouldn't have surprised me?

And more Drusilla fic, oh yes please! I'm terrible at prompts you should know; or rather, I'm quite good at coming up with scenarios or ideas for other people to fill (aka fics I've thought of but know I'll never write) but terrible at prompts as I generally see them: two characters and you must use this one word, etc.

[bk_forever]

I'm glad you like what I've posted so far! I'm only just starting to write BtVS, mainly due to needing to find SOMETHING I could write during a contest on a prompt community where the idea was to fill as many unfilled prompts as possible over the course of a week - I didn't even know most of the fandoms, and I needed to write female characters on one day, so BtVS it was. Trouble is, I wrote 42 ficlets that week spread over four fandoms and it's going to take forever to get them all posted. I'll try to get the Joyce one up this week though.

I'll take prompts of any kind, be they the traditional kind of prompt or scenarios people would like to see. I'd like to write more Buffy fic (though how I'll fit it in with all my other writing I have no idea), I'm just not good at coming up with ideas for the fandom since I haven't watched it for years. I started a re-watch, but I just don't have the time to spare so I've only managed the first 4 episodes in the last month. I'll get there eventually (if life doesn't go crazy again) but until I've managed to watch a couple of seasons, coming up with ideas will be hard. i haven't read much in the fandom either so I don't know what's already been done. Not that it matters much, every writer brings something new even to old ideas. So, feel free to offer scenarios - I can't promise to write them all, and it might take me a while to write anything, but I'd appreciate having some ideas to mull over when I want a change from Torchwood, Doctor Who and FAKE. It's almost all male characters in those so it would be great to have more female-oriented ideas to work with.

Thank you! (I think I might need to get some BtVS icons, but I don't have many spaces left, darn LJ's tiny icon allowance).

[timelordshines.livejournal.com]

Nice.
You got Dru's voice just right with her poetic insanity :-)

[bk_forever]

Thank you! It didn't quite come out as I wanted it, but it's not bad for a first attempt!